Tuesday, October 29, 2013

The Violent Storm Was...

The howling winds of the storm kept me up all through the night. As I lay in my cosy bed I wondered what would happen to our old Victorian home. Would the roof cave in or would the windows smash? The storm might even be capable of completely ripping the house to pieces? Oh how I couldn’t bare the thought of possibly having no house to stay in the next morning.  The violent storm was destroying anything and everything in its path.  As quickly as the storm came it disappeared to reveal the treacherous, ugly mess it had left behind.

4 comments:

  1. Hi Ariana

    What an amazing and clever piece of writing! I really like the way you begin your writing because you effectively 'hook' your reader into reading your writing.

    You have used questions well, have added personal voice and have written a satisfying ending to your story.

    Great job! I look forward to reading your next 100WC!

    From Mrs Natusch

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    1. Mrs Natusch,
      Thank-you for the comment. I am looking forward to the next 100WC as well! I wonder what the next prompt is?

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  2. Hi Ariana
    You have put a lot of thought into this piece. I like how you linked the fragile old Victorian house to this week's theme of the storm. You took me back to a different time.

    Mrs Paton

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    1. Mrs Paton,
      Thank-you for commenting I am glad you liked my story. It took me awhile but it was worth it. It would be even better if my writing got showcased!

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